Soaring through the puffy clouds, twisting through the air,
Regulating precipitation is my designated care.
With five-clawed toes and a wingless snaky length
I am regal, Imperial: gifted with Dragon strength.
The atmosphere is my open, continuous lair.
Imperial China is great, vast, monumental:
The Emperor expects me to be sentimental.
“Uphold the divine honor of the dynasty in power!
Exult in its glory; guard it like a precious flower.”
I mustn’t ignore His Highness when he gets temperamental.
Insurrection erupts on a far-flung plateau,
A few rebellious elements disrupting the flow.
Yet these are mortal concerns; I make rain for the crops.
Frankly, I don’t give a damn about ideological props.
The peasant families need nourishing harvests to sow.
The Emperor summons me to the Forbidden City, in Peking . . .
(Continued and completed here: http://elfwood.lysator.liu.se/libr/p/j/p... )
What do you think of this old, Chinese dragon-related poem I wrote?
that's awesome!! i'm going to steal a line from it and use it here, to show what i think of all the non-answerers:
"The rebels are cowards and will never show their faces"
i like it.
*sigh* you know, pauly, if you'd asked "OMG! did you see Paris' new nail polish?" you'd have gotten 150answers, and 100 would have starred it as interesting.
Reply:You've done a fantastic job with this. You've missed a beat here and there, but nothing you couldn't easily fix. For example, "the emperor expects me to be sentimental" might have flowed better as "the emperor expects me to be more sentimental"...try it and see how it rolls of your tongue. There are only a few other places like this in your otherwise exquisite poem. Very well thought out, very well done.
congrats...keep writing
Reply:Ooooh....deep.
Now my brain hurts.....thanks!
Reply:I think I said this before, you have skills...Are you famous?-LOL,Rogue
Reply:So DRAGON second to say job well done
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