What do you think of this old, Chinese dragon-related poem I wrote?

Soaring through the puffy clouds, twisting through the air,


Regulating precipitation is my designated care.


With five-clawed toes and a wingless snaky length


I am regal, Imperial: gifted with Dragon strength.


The atmosphere is my open, continuous lair.





Imperial China is great, vast, monumental:


The Emperor expects me to be sentimental.


“Uphold the divine honor of the dynasty in power!


Exult in its glory; guard it like a precious flower.”


I mustn’t ignore His Highness when he gets temperamental.





Insurrection erupts on a far-flung plateau,


A few rebellious elements disrupting the flow.


Yet these are mortal concerns; I make rain for the crops.


Frankly, I don’t give a damn about ideological props.


The peasant families need nourishing harvests to sow.





The Emperor summons me to the Forbidden City, in Peking . . .





(Continued and completed here: http://elfwood.lysator.liu.se/libr/p/j/p... )

What do you think of this old, Chinese dragon-related poem I wrote?
sorry no offense but......i don't have the attention span to read all of that......lolz
Reply:it's crapp with a double p
Reply:I think it's good
Reply:It's really good. Its a lot better than anything I could write. Good job.
Reply:I'm wondering if you'll let me save it.





I like it. *applause*
Reply:You are talented but it was much too long.
Reply:you should really consider writing a book, i really liked that poem, its different from the usual depressing things i usually read.


you have a fascination with dragons.
Reply:it seems pretty good but my neck hurts and i can't really get into poetry right now unless its really short. there, i just saved it and will read it later!
Reply:cool
Reply:If you were to write a collection of poems that all tell a story, have it published... I would definately buy it from the shelf of a book store %26amp; or if you are having a book signing I would want an autographed copy of it too!





Your story poem is beautifully written %26amp; as far as it's length goes people should take a look at the length of some of the most famous poets throughout history.





There are many different types of prose %26amp; verse in poetry. Many of my favorites are the ones that tell a story. There shouldn't be any limitations placed upon the length of any poem.


A great poem will end when it's complete. And the poet will know when it feels right!
Reply:it's alright i guess...
Reply:That was interesting... Keep up the hard work!
Reply:It's excellent! I enjoyed it all immensely! It is well crafted %26amp; I especially love the surprise ending!