What do you think of this poem its called the other side of love?

taking all my power


just to get through to you


love is nothing like a flower


although many say its true





love is more like a thorny vine


that you are constantly climbing


then you wait for the sun to shine


on your love in hiding





so tell me why you think love is blissful


why do you think love is easy


wait until you had a fistful


its actually quite uneasy

What do you think of this poem its called the other side of love?
My word! that is really good. Did you write that? I have to say, if you added a little more to it, you could get it published! I liked the simile of love like a thorn. Its so true it you get on loves wrong side. LOL. Kudos for you.
Reply:I think its an OK poem. You seem to be talking to someone in particular though, so a lot of your "audience" is going to be disillusioned when they cant identify with your apparent target listener of someone who "thinks love is blissful."





Rather than "talking to someone" take your emotions to another level of abstraction. What is it about love being "like a thorny vine" that might be interesting for everyone to read and experience through your poetry.
Reply:It is good Emily! Let me touch it up a bit.





It takes all of my power


just to get through to you


Love is nothing like a flower


although many say it's true





Love feels more like a thorny vine


that you are constantly climbing


as you wait for the sun to shine


on your love still in hiding





Pray tell me why love is blissful


Why do you think love is easy?


Wait until you had a fistful


It's actually quite queasy











I hope I helped somewhat. Keep writing. Love is certainly complex; but as Shakespeare said: " It is better to have loved and lost than never having loved at all".
Reply:I love it...although the rhythm could use a little work. It works well enough for the most part, but on the last line it switches to a four-beat time (your pattern goes: 4 beats, 3 beats, 4 beats, 3 beats....). This may be the effect you want, but it might be better to take out a beat there. Also, I find myself wishing there was a little more alliteration, and that you used a word other than "uneasy" in the last line. Otherwise, this is a beautiful poem and has great potential.
Reply:Emily


I believe you wrote this poem


many of us write poetry


What you wrote is beautiful


I can see where the name was derived


( The other side of love )


One person love is true


the other person says othewise.


Love is nothing like a flower


Or another line love is a thorny vine
Reply:Very nice poem, powerful!!


I know you put meaning into it the way you talked about love and all the rumors about it, ect....


I liked it and i would give it a 81/2 out of 10!!


Very nice!!
Reply:I LOVE THIS POEM YOUR A GOOD WRITER!!
Reply:I like it. Thanks for sharing.